1、高级写作-6 及答案解析(总分：8.00，做题时间：90 分钟)一、写作题(总题数：2，分数：8.00)1.PART ONEQuestion 1 The chart below shows the distribution of positive and negative responses given in a market survey about service provision at a leisure centre. Using the information from the chart, write a short report about the results of the
2、 market survey, describing customer reactions to the services provided. Write 120140 words.（分数：2.00）_PART TWOWrite an answer to ONE of the questions 2-4 in this part. Write your answer in 200-250 words.（分数：6.00）(1).Question 2 Your company recently sponsored a national event for the first time and yo
3、ur manager has asked you to write a report on this. Write your report for your manager, including the following information: a brief description of the event, which aspects of the event were particularly successful and why, the benefits to the company of sponsoring the event, what needs to be done b
4、efore considering further sponsorship.（分数：2.00）_(2).Question 3 Your company has recently been taken over by another company, and your department has been restructured. This has resulted in a number of problems which you want to make the new owners award of. Write a letter to the Managing Director of
5、 the new owners: outlining what the situation in your department was before the takeover, explaining what problems have arisen and why, suggesting how these problems could be resolved, warning what might happen if these problems are not resolved.（分数：2.00）_(3).Question 4 Your companys export sales ha
6、ve been falling and the Sales Manger has asked you to consider ways of improving them. Write your proposal for the Sales Manager: giving reasons for the decline in the companys export sales, suggesting ways of improving export sales, outlining the additional resources that would be required.（分数：2.00
7、）_高级写作-6 答案解析(总分：8.00，做题时间：90 分钟)一、写作题(总题数：2，分数：8.00)1.PART ONEQuestion 1 The chart below shows the distribution of positive and negative responses given in a market survey about service provision at a leisure centre. Using the information from the chart, write a short report about the results of th
8、e market survey, describing customer reactions to the services provided. Write 120140 words.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(This bar charts shows the number of positive and negative responses given by customers in a market survey about services at a leisure centre.Asked about the parking facilities at the leisure c
9、entre 700 customers responded positively, whereas 550 said something negative about it. Looking at the ticket costs there were almost three times as many people responding negatively than positive. With only 350 positive responses. The booking service was equally evaluated. For this service the surv
10、ey counted 650 positive and 600 negative responses. In contrast to the ticket costs the attitude of staff was evaluated very positively. Only a fourth of 1250 asked customers complained about the attitude of staff. 950 people thought positively about the staff at the leisure centre. Summarising the
11、results of this survey you can say that there is need for improvement in the fields of ticket costs, booking service and parking.)解析：解析 该习作较好地完成了写作任务，题目中所列的主要内容都包括在内。作者能够清晰地表达出表格中所体现的全部信息，阐述较为准确。文章对于语言的运用掌握得比较好，能够娴熟地运用动词的分词形式及被动语态，但仍有少量的语法错误，如 a fourth of 1250 asked customers中，asked 和customers是被动关系，
12、应改为 customers asked才准确。作者对于词汇的使用比较丰富，且用法比较准确。全文布局合理，大量衔接词的运用，如 whereas，in contrast to 都体现了作者较为严谨的文章布局。PART TWOWrite an answer to ONE of the questions 2-4 in this part. Write your answer in 200-250 words.（分数：6.00）(1).Question 2 Your company recently sponsored a national event for the first time and y
13、our manager has asked you to write a report on this. Write your report for your manager, including the following information: a brief description of the event, which aspects of the event were particularly successful and why, the benefits to the company of sponsoring the event, what needs to be done
14、before considering further sponsorship.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(The aim of this report is to give an overview of the event our company decide to sponsor and present the benefits and the pitfalls.Introduction to the eventComputer 2003 was the fifth edition of an annual event held in Lausanne (Switzerland). It
15、s goal is to present and promote the innovations in the IT field.Its successDesigned to inform professionals, the event also reached the interest of the public. During the whole week, the guests took park very actively in the meetings, thereby demonstrating a huge and shared interest, and the public
16、 was nothing if not captivated by the demonstrations and shows.Unfortunately, the opening hours were relatively restrictive and it was therefore really difficult for the visitors to see everything.The place of our companyAs a widely recognized training services provider, we were offered in return of
17、 our sponsorship a place to promote our books and training programmers, complemented by advertising areas.We therefore have been able to reach many potential customers as well as other companies interested in consolidating their staffs knowledge.The conclusion and expectations of the futureOur compa
18、ny was really well exposed and reached many new potential clients. There is no doubt that our future sales will benefit from the numerous contacts our staff made, and the return on investment is therefore undoubtedly really good and worth our sponsorship.We should consider this type of action more o
19、ften. But, as our staff is not used to this type of publicity, we should consider a special training in providing the company and its service before doing this type of action again.)解析：解析 该文是一篇非常优秀的分析报告。文中涵盖了题目规定的所有内容，出色地完成了写作任务。作者对于语言的使用熟练自然，能够娴熟地掌握并准确使用同位语从句，定语从句等复杂句式。作者词汇表达非常丰富，一些复杂词汇，如 pitfalls，
20、promote，consolidating，potential 的使用都非常自然精确。文章谋篇布局非常合理，开篇就清晰阐述了本文的写作目的，要点的表述也十分清晰明确。作者还大量运用了衔接词，例如 thereby，unfortunately，therefore 等等，都体现出了文章精确的逻辑和布局。(2).Question 3 Your company has recently been taken over by another company, and your department has been restructured. This has resulted in a number o
21、f problems which you want to make the new owners award of. Write a letter to the Managing Director of the new owners: outlining what the situation in your department was before the takeover, explaining what problems have arisen and why, suggesting how these problems could be resolved, warning what m
22、ight happen if these problems are not resolved.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(Re: Human Resources Department-restructuringDear Mr. Blackwell,Further to our phone conversation of yesterday, I am writing to detail and explain issues related to the recent restructuring of the HR department. To begin with, I would lik
23、e to outline what the situation in the department was before the takeover and what has changed since then. Previously led by a local HR manager, our team was handling day to-day issues and was really open to listen and support employees. Since the takeover, we are now managed by a supervisor who is
24、based in the UK.As a result, it is difficult to touch base with him on a daily basis and because hes overloaded with his own team in London, it appears that he might not be able to involve himself with the current issues arising within our team.I fully understand that the restructuring has resulted
25、in increasing the workload in HR but as we are going through severe changes, the staff members need to be supported and guided by a senior manager who could provide them with a legal advice.Therefore, I suggest organizing weekly team meetings with the new HR manager as well as arranging one-on-ones
26、with each HR member so they can understand what is really expected from them and in which direction this company is going towards.I think that the above should be seen as a high priority because people tend to feel lost and in secured nowadays and, therefore, dont show a positive attitude.I look for
27、ward to hearing from you.Best regards,Eric Marzi)解析：解析 该习作较好地完成了写作任务，包括了题目要求的所有内容，表达清晰精炼。作者对于语言的掌握能力较强，对于简单句、复合句以及时态的把握比较自然准确。但文中也存在着一些错误，如对于完成时态的表述上。值得一提的是，文章中使用了大量的被动语态，且使用较为准确。文章用词比较丰富，结构布局合理，使用了较多的衔接词，如 to begin with，as a result，therefore 等。本文比较符合信件的格式与写作习惯。(3).Question 4 Your companys export sa
28、les have been falling and the Sales Manger has asked you to consider ways of improving them. Write your proposal for the Sales Manager: giving reasons for the decline in the companys export sales, suggesting ways of improving export sales, outlining the additional resources that would be required.（分
29、数：2.00）_正确答案：(ObjectiveExport sales decline analysisIntroductionThe aim of this report is to bring to management attention the causes of the dramatic sales decline over the last 3 quarters.FindingsAs all of us are award the main reason for this sharp collapse can be found in two different problems:
30、the first, the devaluation of US dollars; the second, an inefficient sales force and, in particular an incompetent export manager incapable of motivating the staff. While the first issue can be addressed with a more accurate analysis of the prices of our products the second will require a swift mana
31、gement decision in order to restructure the organization.Recommendation and ConclusionIn order to address the first issue it is mandatory that management delegates more power to the CFO in order to adjust our prices to the new exchange rate on a regular basis. On the organization side, on the contra
32、ry, man agent will be required to appoint a new export manager with more initiative and motivated to rebuild the entire staff.Of course all this will require an additional investment of resources and some quarters of negative sales. In particular recruiting a new export manager will require an accur
33、ate selection process and an integration plan of a couple of months before tangible results can be seen. However Im confident that the change will be extremely beneficial in energizing a very demotivated sales force.)解析：解析 这是一篇比较好的习作。文章涵盖了题目所列出的主要内容，要点阐述非常明确。作者布局较为合理，开篇提出本文的写作目的，然后分点陈述，结构非常清晰，并且对于语言的运用能力也比较强，文中对于复合句的使用较为准确、恰当。但作者对于比较级的使用仍稍欠妥当，如 a new export manager with more initiative and motivated to中，从结构一致上看 more后面要跟名词，因此应用motivation而不是 motivated。总体来讲，除了最后一段使用了比较主观性的短语，如 Im confident that等，该文仍是一篇比较中性得体的商务报告。
